Another Broken Heart (Original)

[! JDM The Professional !]

Hey guys, thought I'd share my latest song with you guys.

Just wrote it last week and would like some feedback.

We could be another bright light shining high above the stars
Watching the flowers bloom in spring, just like our love.
But when love is lost, what do we have left?
What is life, without love? Another broken heart

WHAT IS LIFE, WITHOUT LOVE? ANOTHER BROKEN HEART!

Time is up it lays to rest
All hope seems to fade away
And now as we lay in break
our lives get taken away

We had each other, picking the pieces that we left of.
Watching life, pass by, just like you and I
But when life is lost, who do they turn to next?
What life love, without life? Another broken dream

WHAT IS LOVE, WITHOUT LIFE? ANOTHER BROKEN DREAM!

Time is up there’s nothing left
The constant struggle never stops
Arm in arm we lay to rest
our lives get taken away

Time is up it lays to rest
All hope seems to fade away
And now as we lay in break
our lives get taken away


(sung while chorus is being sung)
OUR LIVES GET TAKEN AWAY!
MY HEART REMAINS ASTRAY!
WHY MUST I LIVE THIS WAY!
WHEN OUR LIVES GET TAKEN AWAY!

Just the lyrics, can't afford recording equipment at the moment, and the studio I use is down at the moment for renovations.

Comments?

Regards,

Jordan Danger Merrick.

P.S if any one wants to read some more of my lyrics, got a stack on file which I can PM.