The 5 Brothers

[Billy-J]

I posted this on HIW a while back and have yet to get any feedback, so I thought I'd post it here, there's more people here compared to all 10 of us on HIW. Anyway, back to the matter at hand. This is a script of the pilot episode of a potential TV sitcom, which me and a few mates have spent a long time writing.

http://www.mediafire.com/?sharekey=70083b86c6ea48dcc79b87b207592a1ce04e75f6e8ebb871 (choose the bigger file, the first one's an older draft with a scene which was terrible and NEEDED changing)

Thoughts on the script? any suggestions for improvements or anything in general?